Journeys in motion is where we created personal narratives of an important event in our life. We spent time training to write descriptive pieces by looking at shells, learning about dialogues, similes, and the heroes journey to make investing and well written stories. Thinking of an important part of my life I had two ideas I could write about. 1. Wrestling CIFS 2. My mothers Birthday. I decided to write about my mothers birthday because it was a big event that I never really talked about, and a moment that impacted my life significantly.
The day of the launch Dr. P gave us a writing prompt.. "It is your first day of internship what does it look like" we started writing a response to this promo and all of a sudden Ms Soler starts to push on the door handle very aggressively. When a student let her in she speed walked across the room, threw her papers on the table and started to cause a ruckus. While Ms. Soler was acting strange Dr.P put on a sweatband and started juggling three blue colored balls. After much confusion, we were then told to write about what just happened in as much detail as possible.
We took a field trip to Vons to do an activity where we could either 1. Observe someone, and in detail write about their life. 2. Interview someone. Me and two others decided to sit in In & Out and observe someone. We had our eyes on a man who came to In & Out in a red porche, dark denim jeans, a polar bear t-shirt, and some flip flops. He walked in, immediately ordered, sat down with a laptop, iPad, and some beats by dre headphones. He was watching a Youtube video, of a gamer playing some sort of racing game. From this we gathered that he is a rich white guy that eats at in & out often. He made the assumption that he grew up rich and privileged. So he doesn't understand the value of handwork, that he is a mommas boy, and he has a hard relationship with his father because he didn't chose the same career path his father did.
At the beginning of the project we wrote a baseline essay to give our teachers an idea of where we were in our writing. I chose to write about the week of CIFS and how it was time I overcame hardship. With the tools I learned from writing descriptive writing going back I would add more similes, and way more description to my work. I would also change the structure, I felt that I overdid it and was boring the readers. I would change the structure of my writing, add more description and show not tell.
How I Won the Right to the Street of Memphis
As a class we read a short story called "How I Won the Right to the Street of Memphis" We broke the story up into parts and in groups of four we created mini scenes. We worked a lot with creating dialogue. I think we did this so that we could work on creating dialogue
Initial Story Ideas
Looking back on these ideas I realized that some of the stories haven't impacted my life as much of other stories. So that helped me chose and eliminate story ideas.
- My Parents Knew a Serial Killer
- Anzo - Borrego Camping Trip
- Volleyball CIFs
- Wrestling CIFs
- My Mom's Birthday
The Hero's journey gave me some sort of structure. I'm not sure that the hero's journey helped me, because I had already had my story before I had the hero's journey so I slightly had the structure without even realizing it. To be quite honest I don't think that hero's journey was helpful to me. Some stories, don't even fit the structure of the heroes journey but, i'm sure it was useful for someone else.
Doing multiple shell description activities helped me apply descriptive writing to my piece by using different forms of writing. Like similes, onimonipia, comparisons. and show not tell.
A golden moment from exhibition was towards the end when we ran out of time and Ana said "You can listen if you want too, i'm very proud of this so I'm going to present it anyways" Despite all the people around her cleaning up she continued to share her story out loud.